Pike River Mine
People make mistakes. Sometimes the mistakes can affect the lives of others; could be a matter of life and death. Taking risks can be necessary, so tragedy’s happen. Lives are lost thanks to bullets, knives, explosions, or natural disasters. Death can appear in a variety of ways and places; mining is one of them. A mine is an underground area containing valuable objects or natural minerals. When people go down to take the valuable objects it’s called mining. Sadly, sometimes mines also contain dangerous chemicals or explosives. That’s why the safety procedure exists.
On Friday, 19 November 2010 at approximately 3:44pm the mine was destroyed, killing 29 people. Only two workers, Daniel Rockhouse and Russell Smith, who were near the entrance were able to leave with their lives. The moment the explosion happened the rescue teams rushed over to the mine, hoping that somebody is alive in there; however, their mission was canceled due to the possibility of more explosions happening. Another explosion happened on 24 November 2010, 2:37pm. After this explosion, all hope of somebody surviving was lost. Soon after this two more explosions happened. The amount of methane found in the mine was so big, it was decided that nobody is allowed to enter the mine again. The bodies couldn’t be retrieved because of the possibility of more people dying; however, some families of the people who died believe it’s worth risking their lives to retrieve the bodies of their loved ones. Three robots with cameras have been sent into the mine. The mine was in terrible condition.
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